It was a cold night in Jamaica , when Tamati and I were walking through the woods. It started to get dark , so we turned around and started to walk back home but out of no where it just started snowing .We rushed home as quickly as possible.
When I woke up I went out to the kitchen and saw Tamati and the nanny on the floor crying. I asked them what was wrong and they told me that the piggies had stolen the precious eggs. Of course I got fired up because I knew what they going to do with the eggs. Tamati seemed to calm me down quickly and said that we will think of a game plan to get them back.
We thought of a good game plan and decided that we were going to need to get as much help as we can possibly get. Tamati and I then went around the neighbourhood to ask if they would help us to get the eggs back.
We gathered at the town hall to discuss the plan with everybody, they all thought that it was a reasonable plan. So we dished out jobs for the people who didn't want to fight but still wanted to help out. While they were doing there bit the rest of us created a pig costume so that we could sneak into pigs headquarters.
It was now 7:30 pm when we were sitting on the hill right were we could see the eggs sitting there. I quietly whispered to the team to put their costumes on. When we were all ready I ordered them to walk past the guards as piggyish as they can possibly be. Believe it or not we actually got past the guards so I told them to go into a building that looked like a good place too hide.
When the coast was clear we decided to try our luck on pretending that we were taking the eggs to the king. We walked over to the guards who were guarding the eggs. I said hello the king has sent me to take the eggs back to the kingdom they seemed to go along with it and let us have the eggs. Now All we had too was get the eggs back to our kingdom.
I checked the time and it was only 8:00 so we were looking pretty good on time. When we got back to the top of the hill we almost got busted but luckily Tamati could fight him off . We made a quick runner and we got back to our kingdom quickly. We thanked everybody for their help and we all had a barbecue to celebrate.
You have set the scene well. You have a clear introduction, middle and end.
ReplyDeleteTry to include direct speech in your writing next time.
Great job Jacob.